Its an untitled work in progress by me about a person named Calithar Harlen. ps tell me how you like it/what i need to do to fix it

Chapter 1 Odd beginnings As a mildly skinny but strong man with a dark-age sword stood on the peak of a hill next to the calm clyan, or town, looking over it as he watched the sun set. It was the most beautiful and peaceful thing Calithar Harlen had ever seen. That is because Calithar is a treyener, or city person. "Well, hopefully war will not find me here." Then he got on his hover bike …

…you're most likely knocked out or fainted. When Hanson tried to dodge the energy blast the three others formed a wall so he was trapped. This was unavoidable. All you could see was a blinding light but that eventually faded out to darkness. There was a good-sized crater in the ground. But Serithian wasn't looking astonished at that it was Calithar. He had suspended himself in mid air...end for now (a work in progress)